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The article was promoted by Hog Farm via FACBot ( talk) 12 June 2022 [1].


Enoch Fenwick

Nominator(s): Ergo Sum 01:39, 14 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

This article is about a Jesuit who, fascinatingly, followed in his brother's (FA) footsteps in becoming the president of Georgetown University, which did not go so well, and he abandoned the presidency and refused to return. Ergo Sum 01:39, 14 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

Image is appropriately licensed, but are there no images of the subject? Nikkimaria ( talk) 02:52, 14 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

  • Unfortunately, none that I have been able to find. Ergo Sum 07:13, 14 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

Comments by Pseud 14

General comments from someone who is unfamiliar with the topic and generally not my area of Wikipedia-interest.

  • Suggest linking rector in the lead and first instance in the body.
  • also entered the priesthood, while another brother did not enter religious life. – “enter” in close proximity, suggest at alternative wording
    • "Enter" is really the typical language for someone joining the Catholic priesthood or religious life. Ergo Sum 01:35, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
  • Novitiate – suggest linking
  • to three others parishes – three other parishes
  • undertook several reforms of the curriculum. – perhaps it should be "undertook several reforms to the curriculum"
    • I think "of" is the most common way of phrasing a reform of something. Ergo Sum 01:36, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
  • "wretched." – believe period should be outside the quotation as the full sentence is not quoted.
  • Enoch Fenwick died on – Fenwick died on...
  • That's all from me. This has been a great read. Pseud 14 ( talk) 21:22, 20 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
Thanks for your review, Pseud 14. Ergo Sum 01:36, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
  • Support on prose -- Pseud 14 ( talk) 03:10, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
    • By the way, if you have the time or inclination, I'd appreciate your feedback on my current FAC. Though not obligatory at all... -- Pseud 14 ( talk) 03:10, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

Comments by Z1720

Non-expert prose review. Only one concern:

  • "Enoch Fenwick was born on May 15, 1780, in St. Mary's County, Maryland, one of four brothers, three of whom would become priests" This is a lot of information for one sentence, so I suggest putting a period after Maryland, as so: "Enoch Fenwick was born on May 15, 1780, in St. Mary's County, Maryland. He was one of four brothers, three of whom would become priests."

I checked the lede and infobox, and everything is in the article. Z1720 ( talk) 14:44, 22 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

Thanks, Z1720. Do let me know if you have any other concerns. Ergo Sum 21:56, 22 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
Support My concern was addressed and I do not have other concerns. Z1720 ( talk) 00:14, 23 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

Source review

Pass. There are quite a few old sources used here, but they're used to support uncontroversial information of a kind that these sources can be considered reliable for. Formatting looks fine. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 16:05, 23 April 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

Comments from Kavyansh

  • "he studied at Georgetown College in Washington, D.C. Like his brother" — I am not sure but shouldn't there be a full stop after D.C., or is there a way to avoid DC at the end of the sentence?
    • The "like his brother" part is meant to pertain to his entrance into the priesthood, not his studying at Georgetown. Ergo Sum 10:54, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
  • "his presidency was considered unsuccessful" — at time or in retrospect?
  • While acceptable, we have both the "United States" and "U.S." in the Infobox
    • I figured there was no need to repeat United States when it occurred just two lines above. Ergo Sum 10:55, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
  • "every other Sunday" — 'every alternative'?
    • I think this might be an instance of AmEng vs. BrEng. Ergo Sum 10:56, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
  • Baltimore is linked twice in the prose.

Support: That is it, nothing major! Great work! – Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 06:31, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[ reply]

Thanks for your review, Kavyansh.Singh. Ergo Sum 10:56, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[ reply]
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